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To continue your writing tips: learn that long sentences and words appeal to the mind; short sentences appeal to the emotions. For the most part, try to balance the two with a careful use of triads, contrast and comparison. If you don't know what a triad is, I just used one; a three part construction of words or phrases. This structure is particularly effective in speeches, but use it sparingly.
On the subject of dialogue, it is to be understood that some writers have a natural ear for rhythm and others don't. The faculty of rhythm, essential in the use of dialogue and dialect, cannot be taught. It may be learned through a study of quality writing. When you use dialogue, to advance your plot or enhance character, try to keep to the bare essentials and don't use any character enhancement where it is not necessary. For example, if only two people are talking, identification is not required unless a point is to be made about attitude or character. Don't ever use words which are not common to normal speech.
I have mentioned dialect. This is a touchy subject. Very few writers can create effective dialect. Be very careful about using any phonetic translation of dialect; it looks phoney and is distracting. If you want to imply dialect, consider using certain words which label the dialect and certain broken sentence structure.
Good luck in your work.
Roger W. Harrington.